Can you rate my deck?

Oh boy...where to begin...I guess first I've got to say keep any deck you build as close to 40 cards as possible at all times. If you can hit 40 exactly then that is great. Why? Simply because this is a game of chance just as much as skill. Having 40 cards boosts your chance of having those cards that'll win you the duel or drawing the one card you need in a tight spot. Another simple lesson is to give your deck a base..what you said the deck is based off of doesn't count as any non OTK (One Turn Kill) deck should have that quality. Either you base it on a monster type or attribute such as dinosaur or earth or you could base it off a special archetype like Crystal Beasts or Gravekeepers. My third thing to say I can't force you to do, I just highly recommend. That is that some of the cards you play are insanely overpowered and because of this the cards exist on the official tournament banlist. 90% of players follow the advanced format banlist because avoiding single cards that make or break the game makes it more enjoyable and strategic..or at least its supposed to. So check the banlist and remove cards that go against it. The last thing I have to teach is whatever deck you decide to build, do a little online research of. There are countless forums and sites saying "rate/fix my ______ deck" so you should be able to find one like that easily. Anyway have fun dueling!